Update on draft

Today we updated our music video again from the feedback we received from our last draft. 

Here are the changes we made:

• During the part when the photo is in the sink, ripped and thrown away we added fire overlays to break the shots up and to make it look more dramatic as it builds up with the music until the instrumental when the fast cuts and flashes represent the girl having a breakdown. Also, it is a binary opposite with the water and fire.
• Fixed the timing as the lip syncing was slightly out of sync and adjusted the timings for the fast cuts.
• Changed the coat shot to footage of the main girl walking past as it was more interesting while the previous shot seemed like it dragged on.
• We slowed down the shot of the holding hands as the insert shot of Elsie broke the flow.
• On the word 'stop' we cut to black as it fits the natural pause of the song and makes it more dramatic for what is going to happen next in the narrative.
• We corrected some colour correction with the sleepover having more of an orange tint while the narrative side having a blue tint. We corrected the shot when the girl got home from finding the boys shirt as the camera adjusted to the lighting, so the footage needed a sharper tint of blue as the footage looked a bit grainy and we wanted to make the colour correction more evident.
• We changed the fade out at the end of the video as it stopped a bit abruptly and we wanted it to be smoother.
• We fixed the shot of Elsie clenching her hand by cutting it to a correct moment, duplicating it and putting it in reverse, as it looked a bit anti-climatic and did not fit the song. 

We got a teacher to watch it to get a fresh view on it, here is some improvements they suggested: